The diagram shows how concentrated apple juice is produced.
The given diagram illustrates the steps involved in producing concentrated apple juice. It is clear that the best apples pass through ten stages before their delivery to consumers.
In the first stage of producingapple juice, apples are harvested from orchards, and the best raw apples are selected from them. A belt receives these apples, which takes them to the washing and sorting section. Once sorted, they are ground into smaller pieces. Subsequently, the crushed apples are passed into a pressing machine and then to a centrifuge machine in stage 5. Here water is removed from the apple concentration. In the following stage, the aroma is added to the concentration before the filtration stage. Next is the pasteurization stage, where the apple concentration is cooked at 80°C. After that, concentrated apple juice is bottled and packed in stages 9 and 10. Finally, the apple juice bottles are ready for delivery.
The essay is logically organized with clear progression through the stages, but could benefit from more explicit connections between steps.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to connect stages.
- Clarify the sequence of steps more explicitly.
- Ensure each stage is clearly differentiated.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary appropriate for describing a process, though some repetition is present.
The essay demonstrates good grammatical range with minor errors that do not impede understanding.
The essay effectively describes the process of producing concentrated apple juice, covering all key stages.
Suggestions
- Ensure all stages are described with equal detail.
- Use more technical terms where appropriate.