the pie chart below show the number of native speakers of different languages in canada in 1996, 2006 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts depict the popularity of various languages among the people of Canada in the years 1996, 2006, and 2016.
Overall, it is evident that English dominated as the most spoken language in Canada over the two decades and the figure for French and other official languages together remained less than half of the population.
In the year 1996, English was the most popular language with more than half of the Canadian population speaking it. Over the decade, the figure decreased by 2% and it concluded at 57% by 2016.
French and other languages which together were spoken relatively less than English comprised around half of the population in the year 1996. Following that, there were slight fluctuations in the number over the period of 10 years. Finally, the figure was 21% for French and 22% for other official languages by 2016.
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. However, there are a few areas where the flow of information could be improved.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Consider using more varied transition words to introduce new ideas or to make comparisons.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are very few grammatical errors.
The essay provides a clear overview and detailed support for the information provided. The task has been addressed fully.
Suggestions
- Make sure to fully explain and support all of your points with relevant data from the charts.