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The maps compare the layouts of Porth Harbour in 2000 and it’s current configuration. Over this time, the harbour has undergone substantial transformation to become more suitable for tourism, including addition of a third dock and recreational areas. In this regard, function of run-down castle has changed and several new facilities have been built.
In 2000, Porth Harbour had sparse amenities. In the northern part of the area, two docks were constructed, one connected to the public beach, being the only way for passenger ferries. As for the western part, there were two parking lots: one accessible via a secondary road and the other via the main road. At the top of the map, showers and toilets were erected so as two provide comfort. Furthermore, two significant areas were occupied by a marina and fishing boats. In the south-east corner, a run-down castle was located along with the public beach, in case of an emergency, a lifeboat could be found at the end of the road.
Fast forward to today, the harbour is more accessible to passenger ferries thanks to the introduction of a third dock. Notably, the number of showers and toilets has doubled, while fishing boats and the marina have swapped positions, making way for more private yachts to enjoy sea scenery. Additionally, newly-built cafes and shops are located between the marina and the lifeboat. Another significant conversion is a hotel that was previously occupied by an old castle and now possesses the public beach, so a new secondary road leads to it.
The essay is well-organized with clear progression of ideas. There is effective use of linking words and phrases, although some transitions could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use more varied transitional phrases to enhance flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea.
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary with some precise word choices. There are occasional inaccuracies.
The essay contains a variety of sentence structures, but there are some grammatical errors and awkward phrasings that affect clarity.
The essay effectively addresses the task, providing a clear comparison between the two maps. Some details could be more explicitly described.
Suggestions
- Include more specific details about changes in layout.
- Clarify the impact of changes on tourism.