The pie chart gives information about the percentage of water use in five different purposes, and bar chart shows the proportion of water use in residential purposes.
The pie chart gives information about the shares of water use in five different purposes, while bar chart illustrates the percentage of water allocated to five residential uses.
Overall, water consumerism was the highest for household purposes, whereas government and other uses accounted for the smallest shares. It also appears that residential water was primarily used for gardening and bathing.
The water utilization was the highest in residential purposes, with 50% used at houses — more than double the figure for apartments, which stood at 20%. Comparively lower proportion were observed in business and industry sections, with their usage figures accounting for 21%. Meanwhile, government and other purposes had the lowest shares, making up negligible shares of 6% and 3%, respectively.
As for the residential water use, bathroom and garden sections led the chart, with their respective figures amounting to a whooping 27% and 28% of the total. This was followed by washing clothes(20%), which was five percentage points higher than the toilet usage and double the amount allocated for kitchen use.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the data. The information is sequenced in a way that makes it easy to follow the trends in the charts. However, there are a few areas where the use of cohesive devices could be improved.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to make the relationships between ideas clearer.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to that topic.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances where word choice could be improved.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are very few grammatical errors. However, there are a few instances where sentence structure could be improved for greater clarity.
The essay provides a clear overview of the information presented in the charts and makes appropriate comparisons where necessary. The key features are identified and described effectively. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and by ensuring that all information is accurately reported.
Suggestions
- Ensure that all information is accurately reported and that the data is correctly interpreted.
- Provide more specific details to support your main points.