Consumers goods
The graph illustrates the expenditure of two different countries on consumers merchandise in 2010
Firstl,in uk three good consumers for merchandise cars,book and cameras.France did not sell should be many cars as the uk.The next popular merchandise is books sold out the 400.000,the last one is cameras.In my opinion UK’s people interest for cameras, and liked.
Secondly,of the performing commodities in the uk computer and perfume.However, computers similar to cameras in the different the rear 10.000.And very lowest performing commodities the perfume, because uk’s people don’t like the perfume and the perfume not interesting for UK’s people
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