The diagram below shows one way of manufacturing ceramic pots
The given process depicts how the ceramic pots are made in a series of consecutive steps. Looking from an overall perspective, it is obvious that there are three major steps: starting off with digging the raw material, followed by factory work, and ending off with colored processes. Additionally, this process is a highly machine-driven one, requiring much time and equipment for its completion.
The first stages are somewhat simple: materials, in other words, sand, are excavated, after which it is taken to the factory. Once cluttered, sand is crushing in the special iron containers. In the next container, some water is added and then mixed with sand. Before drying for 5 to 6 hours, the mixture is molded.
From that point forward, the dried mud assembled for the clay spots which is ready to freez over 1000°C . To encure the permanence of colours, pots are stacked in a color-firing devices. Finally clay-pots are ready to sell.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the process. The use of cohesive devices is effective, and there is a good balance between different stages of the process.
Suggestions
- Consider using a wider range of linking words and phrases to make the progression of ideas more fluid.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. The vocabulary is generally used appropriately.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are few grammatical errors.
The essay provides a detailed description of the process and addresses all parts of the task. The information is presented in a logical sequence.
Suggestions
- Make sure to use an academic tone throughout the essay. There are a few informal expressions that should be revised.