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The maps illustrate the changes in the city of Nelson between the year 2000 and the present day
Overall the city has experienced significant development,and modernization including the introduction of a bike rental scheme and entertainment options near the port.
While the university unchanged other areas ,such as the market and transportation systems, have been modernized.
In 2000 the city had a train station on the left and old market below it.The city centre was located in the middle of the map and there was a university to the North,the port was to the South of the city and there were no other major facilities
Today several improvements have been made ,the train station has been replaced by a new train station,and a hall of residence has been constructed next to the university a new shopping centre has been built near the university a bike rental scheme has been established in the city center.The area South of the city center has been transformed into a pedestrian -only zone with new shop a restaurant and bars and clubs.
To the North a hall of residence has been constructed providing accomodation for students.
The essay presents information in a logical sequence, but there are occasional lapses in coherence.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to connect ideas smoothly.
- Ensure consistent use of tenses.
- Clarify the sequence of changes more explicitly.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary, though some repetition is present.
The essay demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but with some grammatical errors.
The essay addresses the task effectively, describing the changes in the city with relevant details.
Suggestions
- Include more specific details about the changes.
- Ensure all mentioned changes are clearly tied to the maps.