The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010
The bar chart compares the amount of money France and the UK spent on five different products in 2010. Overall, the British expended more on cars, books, and especially on cameras, while their counterparts showed higher figures for computers and perfume. In both countries, sales of cars were the highest, as opposed to perfume, which was the least preferred.
In the United Kingdom, expenditure rates on cars, books, and cameras were indicated with comparatively small disparity, exhibiting 450,000, 400,000, and 350,000 pounds sterling, respectively. Figures for France on these goods were considerably smaller, with that for cars being the higher, at 400,000 pounds. 300,000 pounds France spent on books, and a half of this amount was spent on cameras, which made literature more pronounced among citizens.
Regarding remaining consumptions, in both countries, computers were highly preferred, where the British spent 350,000 pounds to buy this item, and less than 400.000-pounds were spent in France. A similar pattern was shown in perfume expenditures. For the UK, this product was the least investable, and annual expenditure exhibited approximately 150,000 pounds, but in France it was more valuable, at 200,000 pounds.
The essay is generally well-organized with a clear overview and logical structure. However, some transitions between ideas could be smoother.
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- Use linking words to enhance flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
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The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary, though some word choices could be more precise.
The essay uses a variety of grammatical structures, but there are minor errors that affect precision.
The essay effectively addresses the task, providing a clear comparison of expenditures in both countries. All key features are highlighted.
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- Include more specific data to support comparisons.