the table below compares water use in four different counties.
The table gives a breakdown of water use in four specific nations. The information is broken down into domestic, industrial, and agricultural use of water.
Agriculture consumes the highest percentage of water in Egypt and Saudi Arabia, with respective figures amounting to a staggering 82% and 64%. Next comes industrial use, but the latter country uses three times as much water, 30%, compared with Egypt, at 10%, while the figures for domestic water use are below 10% in each nation.
In contrast, of the three purposes, industrial use stands out in New Zealand and Canada, albeit with a big difference. Their consumption of water accounts for 46% and 70%, respectively. In New Zealand, however, agricultural water use is not too far behind, making up 44% of the total, whereas a mere 10% of water is used in this respect in Canada. A further 20% in Canada and 10% in New Zealand is utilized at homes.
Overall, while agricultural use of water is by far the highest in Egypt and Saudi Arabia, New Zealand and Canada use water predominantly for industrial purposes. Of particular note is the least amount of water used in houses, with the exception of Canada.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the information. The writer uses appropriate cohesive devices to link ideas and paragraphs, and there is a clear progression of information from general to specific.
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The writer uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. The vocabulary is generally used appropriately, with some minor errors or awkward phrases.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and the majority of sentences are error-free. There are a few minor errors, but these do not impede communication.
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