The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of residents’ coffee and tea purchasing and consuming habits in last 4 weeks in five different cities (Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide, and Hobart) in Australia.
In general, it is evident that going to a cafe to have coffee or tea was the most common habit, except in Adelaide. Additionally, the percentage of people buying instant coffee was always higher than that of those purchasing fresh coffee in all cities.
In terms of Sydney and Melbourne, while the percentage of Sydney’s people drinking tea or coffee at a cafe was about 61%, the figure for Melbourne was slightly higher, at around 63%. Meanwhile, above 45% of citizens in Sydney and Melbourne had a habit of buying instant coffee, whereas the proportions of those purchasing fresh coffee in these two cities were around 44% and 43% respectively.
Moving on to the remaining cities, having coffee or tea at a cafe accounted for the largest percentage of people in Hobart, followed by Brisbane and Adelaide, at approximately 51% and 49% respectively. At the same time, around 53% of people in Brisbane and Hobart chose to buy instant coffee, compared to nearly 50% of those in Adelaide. Finally, a close similarity can be seen in the percentage of people buying fresh coffee in Brisbane and Adelaide, at around 34%, while Hobart’s figure was higher, at roughly 38%.
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. The use of cohesive devices is effective, and the information flows smoothly throughout the report. However, there are a few areas where the flow of information could be improved.
Suggestions
- Consider using more varied linking words to improve the flow of information.
- Start each new idea or piece of information with a clear and relevant introductory phrase.
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary and uses some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of repetition that could be avoided.
The essay uses a variety of complex structures and shows a good control of grammar and punctuation. However, there are a few minor errors that could be addressed.
The essay provides a clear overview and detailed information on the various aspects of the data. The information is presented in a logical sequence, making it easy to follow and understand. However, the task requires an overview that summarizes the main trends, differences, or stages of the data. The essay should focus on the most significant features of the chart and avoid getting lost in details.
Suggestions
- Focus on the main trends, differences, or stages of the data and avoid getting lost in details.
- Summarize the key features of the chart in the overview and use the body paragraphs to support the main points with detailed information.
- Clearly compare and contrast the data between the cities and the coffee and tea purchasing and consuming habits.