The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart below illustrates the result of a survey about peoples coffe and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australan cities.
Overall,its evidant that going to cafe to gave a coffer or tea was the most common habbit,except Adeliade.Additionally the percentage of people buying instant coffee was always higher than other cities.
In terms of Sydney and Melbroune persentage of citizen who went to a cafe for coffee or tea was bit more than 60%.Meanwhile the above 45% in Sydney bought instant coffee while in Melbourne this indicator was higher nearly 49%.Propotion of fresh coffee buyers was small in both cities in Sydney 43% and in Melbourne 41%.
Moving on to the remaining cities Hobar had largest index of caffe or tea consumers.After them Brisbane and Adelaide about 53% and 50% respectively.At the same time around the 53% of people in Brisbane and Adeladie chose to buy instant coffee than fresh.The highest index of instant coffee in these 5 cities had Hobart and lowest Sydney.
The essay presents information in a somewhat logical order but lacks clear progression and connection between ideas.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to connect ideas more clearly.
- Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea.
- Provide more detailed comparisons between the cities.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with some errors in word choice and spelling.
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors and lacks complex sentence structures.
The essay attempts to summarize the main features of the chart but lacks detailed comparisons and contains inaccuracies.
Suggestions
- Provide more accurate data from the chart.
- Include more detailed comparisons between the cities.
- Ensure all key features are covered.