The maps show changes in a city in 1950 and now. Describe the changes and make a comparison where relevant.
The maps compare the layout of a city in 1950 with the current one. Overall, the city has experienced a major transformation over the period with a significant increase in its population, business and residential areas. While a new road has been built in the city with a new bridge over it, the airport has also been extended. The noticeable change has been the introduction of the artificial lake somewhat in the middle of the city.
In 1950, the city was a small one with only 20,000 residents living in an area in the middle of the city. There were two major roads in the city. The former was running through the city from west to the east of the map where the airport was located. The latter, the one with a little bridge where the road crossed the river, was leading from south to north. The business district was situated on the crossing point of the roads. The only government setting was near the bridge over the river that was in the southern half of the map.
As for the present plan of the city, it has become more residential with a 10-fold increase in its population. While people used to live in only northern part of the city, now they reside in most of both northern and southern parts. Similarly, the business areas have also been extended further to the south, increasing greatly in size. In the southern half of the layout, another main road has been constructed from the south-west corner of the map, leading to the center to join in the another road, being curbed in shape. Below this new road, another larger government building have been built. The most significant change to the layout of the city have been the artificial lake formed by building a dam to the river on the left bottom side of the map. As a result, the bridge next to the little government building has been lengthened. Lastly, the airport has also been extended further to the south.
The essay is well-organized with a clear progression of ideas. However, some transitions between ideas could be smoother.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to connect ideas.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear focus.
- Avoid abrupt shifts in topics.
The vocabulary is appropriate and varied, though some phrases could be more precise.
The essay demonstrates a range of grammatical structures with some errors.
The essay effectively describes and compares the changes in the city layout, addressing all parts of the task.