The line graph depicts the percentage of sales for products A and B in an unidentified country over the period from 2010 to 2019.
The line graph illustrates the proportion of sales for products A and B in an unspecified country from 2010 to 2019.
Overall, both products showed fluctuating figures, but despite having a smaller percentage of sales for Product A, this figure gradually rose by the end of the period. Notably, although there was higher share of sale for product B in the first period, the result was showed decline proportion, in the finally year.
The figure for B exhibited a higher value of 22 in the initial year. This was followed by a slow rise to 25 in the middle of the year, but then it showed fluctuating growth over the remaining years. Finally, in the last three years, the sales figure experienced a gradual increase.
Starting at period at 20, the figure for sales of Product A increased slowly until 2014, but the sales showed a slight decline in 2015 to 28%. Between 2016 and 2018, the share of sales for Product A experienced a gradual rise, reaching 47%. At the end of the period, sales figures stagnated.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a sufficient range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are few grammatical errors. However, there are some errors in the use of articles and prepositions.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the information. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and by making more precise comparisons.
Suggestions
- Provide more specific details and make more precise comparisons.
- Consider the implications of the data and provide a more in-depth analysis.