International tourism has brought enormous benefits to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the advantages of international tourism outweigh the disadvantages?
International tourism bring advantages to a lot of country.In these times, there is worry about its effect on local people and the place. International turism has many benefits rather than drawbacks.
It has many benefits of International tourism. It brings investment. For example, in Uzbekistan, tourists come to Uzbekistan to see a bunch of buildings of the Samarkand and it is profit for this country. Also, some people can learn many things. These are bussiness, technology and other new things. It can help improve the country. Maybe, in this countryʼs people interested in their history of country, and learn this buildings, history. Bussinessmens be partner about some bussiness. So, they may join and agree these things. Becouse, it is profit both of them. These are advantages sides.
On the other hand. International tourism has a bunch of disadvantages sides. Tourists may steal diskind of things. In addition, they may crime historical thing or money from bank and it is very bad for country. They harm to people. For example, in 1993 year. Two tourists beat the famous writer in the France and this was popular in this year. This is very disadvantages sides.
In conclusion.This both good and bad sides. I think that, International tourism is nice for improve our brain and country budget. But it has bad sides. Advantages sides more than drawbacks.
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