The chart shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time.
The chart illustrates data about Britain’s number of males and females focusing on further education in three varying periods and splitting up two categories whether they were studying full-time or part-time.
Overall, the most highlighting figure occurred in 1990/91 in female categories studying full-time education. However, the main active trends were for males, with numbers fluctuating over the given periods.
In 1970/71, males studying full-time and part-time education were above than females with 1000 men and around 150 men studying part-time education. As for the female sector, those were responsible for studying full-time around 800 and part-time around 150. In 19080/81, full-time figures decreased in men to just over 900, with part-time education increasing to just under 200. While the figures for women saw an increase in both full-time and part-time education, accounting for over 800 and 200, respectively.
In 1990/91, the year where the women reached a peak surpassing their counterparts, soaring to 1100 in full-time and 300 in part-time education. When it comes to the men’s sector, the figures experienced a slight increase, growing to 900 in full-time and 250 in part-time studying.
The essay presents information logically but lacks clear paragraphing and transitions.
Suggestions
- Use clearer paragraphing to separate different time periods.
- Add linking words to improve flow between sentences.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with occasional errors.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures.
The essay addresses the task but lacks some detailed analysis and comparison.
Suggestions
- Include more detailed comparisons between male and female trends.
- Provide more specific data points to support statements.