The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where
The given maps illustrates the changes of the one floor in the central Library experienced throughout 20 years.
Overall, the library had several internal adjustments such as extension, addition of a section , rearrangement and removal.
In terms of the investigating the plan further, there has been several additions and rearrangements on the right of the floor. An adult fiction books section was added instead of the adult non-fiction books. Furthermore, information desk was added along with the self-service machines, possibly to make the customer service more convenient. The café took Enquiry desk’s place, where previously tickets, book returns and etc took place. Children’s books section was reconstructed into the lecture room.
Meanwhile, on the left side the room that was used before for CDs, videos, computer games was enlarged and turned into a place for storytelling events with sofas and children’s fiction books section. Adult fiction books have taken place near the all reference books before it was transformed into the place where all reference books are kept. Moreover, reading room with newspapers and magazines was transformed into the computer room. Last but not least, the tables and chairs in the hall were demolished.
The essay presents information in a logical order but lacks clear connections between some ideas. Transitions between points are sometimes abrupt.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
- Clarify comparisons between the old and new plans.
The essay uses a sufficient range of vocabulary, but some words are used repetitively or imprecisely.
The essay demonstrates a reasonable range of grammatical structures, but there are noticeable errors in sentence construction.
The essay addresses the task and includes relevant information, but lacks some detailed comparisons and clarity.
Suggestions
- Include more detailed comparisons between the past and present layout.
- Ensure all significant changes are clearly highlighted.