The table and chart below provide a breakdown of the total expenditure and the average amount of money spent by students per week while studying abroad in 4 countries
The table and chart illustrate information about a breakdown of the global candidates’ average amount of money they students spent every week when they were studying abroad in four counties (A, B, C, D).
Overall, what stands out from the table and chart are that when students studied in a country named A spent more money than other counties; in county D, the least amount of money was spent.
Focusing on the expenditures of studying abroad, $265 was spent in county A, which is approximately 100$ more than county B. American spent US$ in country C, students who studied in county C spent 540$.
Focusing on the average amount of money spent by students in county A, students accommodated spending 220$ per week. Additionally, they have spent 450$ (and 430$ for tuition and living cost every week respectively.
Regarding the county B, students spent 220$ for accommodation and 320$ for tuition cost. Their tuition fee has been 320$ per week. For the students who have studied in county C, they accommodated spending 240$. Furthermore, their tuition fee and living cost were 220 and 225$ respectively. Looking for detail in county D, they spent less money for accommodation and living cost, which made up 200 and 220$. However, their tuition fee was 25$
The essay lacks clear organization and logical progression of ideas. Transitions between sentences and paragraphs are weak, leading to a lack of coherence.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to connect ideas more clearly.
- Organize information in a logical order.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
The lexical resource is limited, with some repetition and incorrect word choices.
There are frequent grammatical errors and issues with sentence structure, affecting the clarity of the essay.
The essay does not accurately present or interpret the data from the table and chart. Some figures are incorrect, and there is a lack of clear analysis.
Suggestions
- Ensure accuracy in reporting figures from the chart and table.
- Provide a clear and accurate analysis of the data.
- Focus on key trends and comparisons.