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Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Today there is a perception that wild animals have no role in the nature, that is why trying to preserve is a waste of resources. While there are some factors supporting their view, I believe wild animals are an essential part of the ecosystem.
On the one hand, protecting wildlife requires significant funding and effort. Initially, it has been reported that almost 10 billion dollars are spent annually on global wildlife conservation, leading to debates among some that the money could be better invested in fields such as education and healthcare. Additionally, an increasing number of people are involved in the process that requires a lot of hard work and attention. If they paid more attention to other things mentioned above, these spheres would be more developed.
Despite the mentioned reasons, protecting wildlife is crucial not only for the environment but also for the survival of human kind. Firstly, wild animals play a significant role in maintaining balance of the ecology. The extinction of one species of wild animals results in the over population of herbivores, which is very harmful to several plants. Secondly, some individuals generate significant income from wildlife conservation. For instance, Dean Sneider, a conservationist blogger, gain a huge amount of income through posting videos regarding protection of wild animals on YouTube. Finally, most wild animals inhabit diverse habitats such as rainforests or savannahs, which contribute to the Earth’s fresh air. When wild animals become extinct, these habitats will disappear for various reasons, posing a significant threat to the entire environment as well as to human beings.
In conclusion, despite some people’s underestimation of the significance of wild animals, their protection is crucial for the future of our planet.

7.0

The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. The introduction and conclusion are clear and relevant. However, there are a few areas where the flow of ideas could be improved.

Suggestions
  • Try to use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas.
  • Make sure that your ideas are fully developed and explained.

The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.

The essay uses a wide range of complex structures. However, there are a few grammatical errors and awkward constructions.

The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout. The arguments are well-developed and supported with relevant examples. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific examples and evidence.

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  • Try to include more specific examples and evidence to support your arguments.