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Some young people are leaving the countrside to live in cities and towns, leaving only old people in the countryside. What problems are caused by this issue? What can be done to solve this situation?

In these days, it is being common that youngsters prefer to live in the modern cities in pursuit of jobs and education leaving their family members without any care in the countryside. While some problems are certain to arise as a result of this trend, a number of steps can be taken to deal with them.
To begin with, the leave of juveniles may lead to unfavorable phenomenon. First of all, moving to downtowns makes the elders situation dire. Those who are in need of care, will be deprived of support. Since old individuals are old and not able to meet some daily needs like earn money or going to supermarket in order to purchase products, their life will be challenging. Apart from that as they are most times at home, elderly people want to have heart-to-heart, warm conversations. as a result of their young family members have moved to cities, they may lack social bonds with them which indeed leads them to feel isolated. Last but not least, the massive influx of youngsters to cities brings the overpopulation in cities. This, in turn, may be the root cause of problems like increased unemployment or even urbanization.
Nevertheless, several effective steps can be taken to tackle these issues. First and foremost, a number of amenities ranging from universities and healthcare centers to factories and offices have to be built, and government plays a key role in those incentives. By making the countryside competitive to cities, leaving to urbans will no longer be needed. in that case the move of Youngs will be reduced and urges them to stay with their loved ones. This automatically averts the problems like isolation of the olds. Another solution would be instilling the sense of familyhood in younger generation. Having taught them the value of family, juveniles become more affectionate to their family members and never leave them alone in any circumstances.
In conclusion, from the move of young individuals to the city centers and leaving their elders in countryside arose some issues such as lack of support, sense of loneliness and even urbanization, a number of effective solution can be done in governmental and personal scale. For example, setting up modern facilities by the former and educating youngsters to value the family by latter.

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The essay is logically organized and the progression of ideas is clear. However, there are some issues with the use of cohesive devices and the overall cohesion of the essay. The essay follows a logical structure, but the use of cohesive devices is sometimes inaccurate or missing, making the connection between ideas less smooth. Additionally, the conclusion could be more effective in summarizing the main points and reiterating the proposed solutions.

Suggestions
  • Use a variety of cohesive devices to ensure smooth transition between ideas.
  • Make sure to link all parts of your essay back to the main topic in a coherent way.

The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. The essay demonstrates a good command of a wide range of vocabulary relevant to the topic, with some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choices that could be revised for clarity and precision. Additionally, the use of more formal language throughout the essay would help to strengthen the overall tone.

The essay uses a variety of complex structures. However, there are some grammatical errors and inaccuracies in the use of prepositions. The essay uses a variety of complex grammatical structures with a good level of accuracy. However, there are a few minor errors that could be corrected for clarity and precision. Additionally, the use of more formal language and grammatical structures would help to strengthen the overall quality of the essay.

The essay addresses the task effectively and provides a clear position throughout the response. However, the essay could provide more specific examples to support the arguments. The essay effectively addresses the prompt by discussing the issues caused by young people moving to cities and providing solutions to address these problems. The writer presents a clear position and supports it with relevant examples. However, the conclusion could be more effective in summarizing the main points and reiterating the proposed solutions.

Suggestions
  • Provide more specific examples to support your arguments.
  • Ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus and is well-developed.