The bar chart illustrates the percentage of men and women who did various leisure activities in England in 2006.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of men and women who did various leisure activities in England in 2006.
Overall, watching TV was the most popular activity for both genders, while the least popular was playing computer games for males and females.
In detail, around 90% of men and 85% of women watched TV, making it the most common activity. Spending time with family was also very popular, with slightly more women participating than men. Shopping attracted approximately 75% of women, but fewer than 30% of men. Similarly, doing sports was more common among men, with 75% compared to about 70% of women.
Using the internet was done by around 40% of women, double the percentage of men. Reading was equally enjoyed by both genders at approximately 70%. Playing computer games accounted for the lowest participation for both genders, approximately 8-9%.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. The writer uses cohesive devices effectively to link ideas and paragraphs, ensuring a smooth flow of information. The detailed paragraphs are well-structured, with each focusing on a specific leisure activity.
Suggestions
- Consider using a wider range of linking words or phrases to show more variety in your language use.
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary and uses some less common and idiomatic language. The vocabulary is generally well-chosen and appropriate for the task, with some less common terms related to leisure activities.
The essay uses a wide range of complex structures and shows a good level of accuracy. The report demonstrates a good command of complex sentence structures and a high level of grammatical accuracy. Punctuation and sentence structure are well-managed, contributing to the overall clarity of the report.
The report provides a detailed and accurate description of the data presented in the bar chart. It effectively highlights the most popular and least popular leisure activities for both men and women, ensuring a comprehensive coverage of the topic. The report maintains an objective and analytical tone, which is appropriate for the task.
Suggestions
- The report could be enhanced by providing a more detailed comparison of the data. For example, describing the differences in participation rates between men and women for each leisure activity would add depth to the analysis.