The plans show the changes that have taken place in a bookstore
the maps illustrate the transformations that have occurred in a bookstore from 2000 to the present .
Overall , it is apparent that a space for sitting and reading books is provided in current days compared to the past . the number of a few types of books has been extended , and others are still in the same position now.
Starting with altered ones , the long fiction shelf located in the north of the bookstore in 2000 has reduced in size . The art , hobbies, and cookery shelves have been moved next to the fiction . The tables have replaced these 3 departments, which were situated in the middle of the bookstore . The fiction located in the rectangular department in 2000 has been displaced by non-fiction one . the cafe has been built instead of the non-fiction .
Turning to the unchanged ones , the travel and new books departments were located in the west of the bookstore , and they are still at the same location . Also , the location of the desk service, which was in the opposite the new books department , and enterance, which was next to the travel department, are not changed . What do you think of this report .
The essay follows a logical structure but lacks clear paragraphing and some transitions are missing.
Suggestions
- Use clear paragraphing to separate different ideas.
- Add more linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
Uses a range of vocabulary but some repetition and awkward phrasing.
Some grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures are present.
The essay addresses the task and includes relevant details, but lacks depth in analysis.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed comparisons between past and present layouts.
- Include more specific examples from the maps to support points.