The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010
The chart illustrates the amount of money spent on five consumer goods (cars, computers, books, perfume and cameras) in France and the UK in 2010. Units are measured in pounds sterling.
Overall, the UK spent more money on consumer goods than France in the period given. Both the British and the French spent most of their money on cars whereas the least amount of money was spent on perfume in the UK compared to cameras in France. Furthermore, the most significant difference in expenditure between the two countries was on cameras.
In terms of cars, people in the UK spent about £450,000 on this as opposed to the French at £400,000. Similarly, the British expenditure was higher on books than the French (around £400,000 and £300,000 respectively). In the UK, expenditure on cameras (just over £350,000) was over double that of France, which was only £150,000.
On the other hand, the amount of money paid out on the remaining goods was higher in France. Above £350,000 was spent by the French on computers which was slightly more than the British who spent exactly £350,000. Neither of the countries spent much on perfume which accounted for £200,000 of expenditure in France but under £150,000 in the UK.
The essay is well-organized with a clear structure. Each paragraph logically follows the previous one, and there is a clear comparison between the expenditures of the two countries.
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The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary appropriate for the task. The use of terms related to expenditure is effective.
The essay displays a good command of grammar with varied sentence structures. There are minor issues with sentence complexity.
The essay effectively addresses the task, providing a clear and detailed comparison of expenditures in France and the UK. All key features are well-covered.