The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart presents data on the electricity production and consumption in the top ten countries in the year 2014.
Overall, except for the Germany, all the countries produced slightly more electricity than they consumed. China and United States were outliers with the highest numbers.
China produced and consumed the most electricity with 5.398 billion Kwh and 5.322 billion Kwh respectively. The United States followed closely, with its residents consuming 3.866 billion Kwh and 4,099 billion kwh. Russia ranked third, with 1.057 billion Kwh of production and 1.038 Kwh of consumption followed by Japan, with 946.2 billion kwh of production and 856.7 kwh and consumption.
India and Canada ranked fifth and sixth respectively, with India producing 871 billion kwh and consuming 698.8 billion kwh, and Canada having slightly lower numbers for both production and consumption. France and Brazil ranked seventh and eighth respectively, with France producing 5612 billion Kwh and consuming 462.9 billion kwh, and Brazil recording 530.7 billion Kwh of production and 455.8 billion Kwh of consumption
Finally, Germany and Republic of Korea occupied the last two positions, with Germany having higher production than Korea and also consuming more
The essay is logically organized and the information flows in a coherent manner. The introduction provides an overview of the data, and each country is discussed in a logical order. However, there are a few instances where the flow of information could be improved.
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- Ensure that the flow of information is consistent and logical throughout the essay.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances where word choice could be improved.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and there are few grammatical errors. However, there are a few instances where sentence structure could be improved.
The essay provides a clear overview of the data and makes appropriate comparisons where relevant. The information is accurately described and the key features are well supported with specific data. However, the essay could be improved by providing a more detailed analysis of the data and by making more comparisons where relevant.
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- Provide a more detailed analysis of the data, including trends, patterns, and comparisons between countries.
- Make more comparisons where relevant to provide a deeper analysis of the data.