task 1
The graph provides a comparison of the number of tourists who visited a particular Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017.
Overall,the number of tourists visited Caribbean island was 4 million and there were 2 types of visitors who stayed on cruise ship and visitors staying on island. Despite the number of people who stayed on cruise ship witnessed a level-off in 2011,in 2012 there was a gradual rise.The number of tourists who stayed on cruise ship remained stable from 2013 to 2015 and after a year there was a neglible decrease and saw a recovery.If we look at visitors who stayed in island,there was a striking jump in 2012.In general,the total number of tourists experienced a siginificant surge.
in general,the total number of tourists who visited a Caribbean island was a millon at the beginning of the given peiod and then it soared significantly to 3.5 million visitors.In 2010, the tourists who stayed on cruise ship saw a noticable rise from 0,5 to 1.5.Having rised to 1.5 million visitors in 2010,the number of tourists remained stable at 1.5 million until 2012.As regards visitors stayed on the island, there was a flactuation between 2010 and 2012 and then the number of visitors reached its peak to 2 millions from nearly 0,25 million.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the data. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay makes use of a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and the majority of sentences are error-free. However, there are a few grammatical errors that affect the overall clarity of the essay.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and by avoiding the use of symbols such as ‘$’ signs.
Suggestions
- Provide more specific details and data to support your main points.
- Avoid the use of symbols such as ‘$’ signs and ensure that all sentences are complete.