The chart shows the percentages of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day from 2001 to 2008.
The line graph compares the proportions of women, men, and children who consumed five daily portions of fruit and vegetables between 2001 and 2008.
Overall, the percentages of the individuals including five servings of fruit and vegetables in their diet every day followed a growing trend over the period shown. While the percentage of women was consistently higher, the reverse could be observed with children during the given span.
The proportion of women ranked first in all years regarding the daily fruit and vegetable consumption. Starting at just over 20% in 2001, the figure began increasing continuously, reaching a peak of around 35% in 2006. Having peaked, the percentage of women had seen a fall of 5% by the end of the period – still making up higher than the other two groups.
The patterns of men and children consuming five portions of fruit and vegetable, on the other hand, showed a similar upward trend. The figures stood at their respective 18% and 12% in 2001 before they experienced stagnation the next three years. Since then, both percentages grew constantly and reached over 25% in 2007, making the disparity minimal. Despite this significant rise, there was a slight drop in the percentages in the final year.
The essay is well-organized with clear paragraphing and logical progression. It effectively compares the data for different groups.
Suggestions
- Ensure consistent use of linking words to enhance flow.
- Consider summarizing key trends more succinctly.
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary with some precise word choices.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with few errors.
The essay effectively addresses the task, providing a clear overview and detailed comparisons.
Suggestions
- Ensure all key trends and data points are accurately represented.