A group of British and American university students were asked to name their favorite sport from five possible options.
The charts provided show questionary that compare which sport among five options- Soccer,Tennis, Basketball, Badminton as well as Golf university students opt for as a favorite one.
It can be seen that majority of British students prefer Soccer whereas Basketball is more appealing for learners in America.
Additionally, a few students respond that tennis as their lovely sport. The rest of options gathers less votes.
Making up 54 % , the share of Football takes leading position while few students choose Basketball-4% as their favorite sport in Britain. In contrast, the reverse is experienced in America where the figure for Basketball constitutes upward trend (52%) whereas Soccer comes with only 7%.
Turning into Tennis, the share for British students accounts for 21% t which is bigger by 3% than that of American learners.
Disparity less pronounced in the percentage of Badminton in British and America-10% and 12% respectively. The same number of students would rather Golf in both countries with a small percent.
The essay presents information in a somewhat organized manner but lacks clear logical progression. Some sentences are disjointed, and transitions between ideas are not smooth.
Suggestions
- Use linking words to connect ideas more effectively.
- Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea.
- Improve the flow between sentences.
The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary with some inappropriate word choices and repetitions.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward sentence structures that impede understanding.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed explanation and some data is inaccurately or incompletely reported.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed comparisons and explanations.
- Ensure all data from the charts is accurately represented.