Abdurahmon
Nowadays, in cities the biggest problem is traffic jams because of that people most of their time waste on the road. This makes many problem, but there are ways to solve them.
There are some reasons to this problem. Reason one is narrow roads. Due to the fact that the roads are narrow, there is a congestion roads should be at least three rows to prevent traffic jams.
Another problem is there are few parking spaces and drivers should leave their cars on the road and these cars will get in the way.
Finally, there are too many cars in city. For example in Uzbekistan one person have at least two cars.
There are some solutions to this problems. We need to expand the roads and make them more spacious and make more opportunities for drivers.
Another solution is make more parking spaces near every buildings or into buildings that’s can much reduce the traffic jams.
Lastly solution make a law that allows for one family one car and promote public transport like buses and metro trains. Public transportation can help to reduce traffic jams.
In conclusion traffic jams are serious problem for people. A lot of time is waste on roads. Government should make some laws to prevent crowds and develop public transportation.
The essay is logically organized and the progression of ideas is clear. However, there are some issues with the use of cohesive devices and the overall cohesion of the essay. The essay follows a logical structure, but the use of cohesive devices is sometimes inaccurate or missing, making the progression of ideas a bit difficult to follow. Additionally, there are some issues with coherence, as the connection between ideas can be unclear. More explicit linking phrases could help to clarify the relationships between different ideas.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to ensure smooth transition between ideas.
- Make sure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a sufficient range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. The essay demonstrates a reasonable range of vocabulary, with some attempts to use less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation that can be distracting. Additionally, the use of informal language (e.g. ‘waste on the road’) is not appropriate for an academic essay.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are some errors in grammar, but these do not impede communication. The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, and there are some grammatical errors. These errors do not generally impede communication, but they can still be distracting. Proofreading is recommended to correct typographical errors and improve the overall quality of the writing. Additionally, the use of formal language is preferred in academic writing, so expressions like ‘waste on the road’ should be avoided.
The essay addresses the task and provides a relevant response. However, the argument could be more fully developed and supported. The essay addresses the topic by discussing the problem of traffic jams in cities and suggesting potential solutions. However, the response could be more fully developed, with a clearer thesis statement and more detailed support for the proposed solutions. The conclusion is brief and could be more comprehensive.
Suggestions
- Provide a clear thesis statement at the end of the introduction that outlines the main points of the essay.
- Ensure that each paragraph fully develops a single point and is well supported with relevant examples and explanations.