An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What effect does it have on the countries professionals are leaving?

These days a lot of people are leaving their countries to developed countries countries, cause of moder amenities. I think that high quality and better pay can lead to negative impacts such as integration and shortage of skilled professionals.
One reason that when people are skilled they want to have high quality of life, because they can leave from their countries,couse of disappointed of living in poorer countries which had lack opportunities and they also want that their children will have the best education and safety lifestyle. For example, in my country a lot of students were going to work in Korea and go back on their own countries at first, but some of their decided to live in modern countries and have family in there, cause of quality of life. In addition to this, doctors and teachers also want to have better pay and a lot of opportunities, because in developed countries there are a lot of advantages and the government pay more than their own countries’, this advantages can be more beneficial to people, so they are going to leave from their own countries. For example, Some doctors who become qualified, they sometimes leave from their own countries to country which had better salary such as U.S.A and Germany.
I think in this problem has several negative impacts, especially to integration. As people are leaving from their house to foreign countries, some people have not accommodated yet , because when they leave from poor countries, they can face some integration challenges, as a result of which they cannot live more time in there. In one extent their nationality and religion cannot be the same. Nevertheless, when professionals leave from their own countries, in their poorer country faces difficulties to the education or medicine such as shortage of skilled professionals. This effects can lead to more illnesses and unknowledgeable children.
To conclude, these days some professionals want to have high quality and better pay, but this impacts can lead to some difficulties , integration challenges and shortage of skilled professionals as well

6.5

The essay is logically organized and the progression of ideas is clear. However, there are some issues with the use of cohesive devices and the overall cohesion of the essay. The essay follows a logical structure, but the use of cohesive devices is sometimes inaccurate or missing, making the connection between ideas less smooth. Additionally, the conclusion could be more effective in summarizing the main points and reiterating the thesis statement.

Suggestions

Use a variety of cohesive devices to ensure smooth transition between ideas.
Make sure to fully develop your conclusion to effectively summarize the main points and reiterate the thesis statement.

The essay demonstrates a good command of a broad lexical resource. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice. The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary, with some attempts to use more complex language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice that could be revised for clarity and accuracy.

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and a variety of grammatical structures. However, there are several grammatical errors and awkward constructions that hinder overall understanding. The essay attempts to use a variety of sentence structures and shows some control of grammar and punctuation. However, there are several grammatical errors and awkward constructions that hinder overall understanding and could be revised for clarity and accuracy.

The essay addresses the task effectively, providing a clear position throughout the response. However, the argument could be more fully developed and supported with specific examples. The essay addresses the prompt by discussing the reasons behind the migration of professionals to developed countries and the effects this has on their home countries. However, the argument could be more fully developed, and the essay could provide more specific examples to support its points.