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Around the world more and more people today are living in urban areas. Why is this? What problems does this cause?

Nowadays, there is a trend in migration to cities around the world. Urbanization and rise of standard of living there can be the main reasons, but those leads to the issues like inequality and overpopulation in cities.
Delving into the topic of politics and economics, for most of the counties the centralization policy is preferable, because it is much easier to develop only one huge capital city rather than ten different towns. In most cases, Huge cities get more investments from foreign companies, so more offices are built. New York is the most popular example of this phenomenon, as it called the world’s capital, there are offices of Google, Microsoft, Apple etc. It leads to the leak of the people who want to work for these companies and get more salary or for career growth.
Another cause is the territory expansion, when the city captures the suburban areas making it urbanized. So families, who were living for decades outside the city, after the urbanization become citizens. However, as the city receives more subsidies from taxes and government, less the remote places get, so people relocate to megapolises, overcrowding it, leading to more expansion and increasing the gap between the cities and township. Moreover, crime rates may also rise because of the increase of low-income individuals, who can decide to commit it.
To conclude, population in cities surges because of centralization policy and can be the cause of the inequal investments and other problems.

6.5

The essay is logically organized and the progression of ideas is clear. However, there are some issues with the use of cohesive devices and the overall cohesion of the essay. The essay follows a logical structure, but the use of cohesive devices is sometimes inaccurate or missing, making the connection between ideas less smooth. Additionally, the conclusion could be more effective in summarizing the main points and providing a clear final thought.

Suggestions
  • Use a variety of cohesive devices to ensure smooth transition between ideas.
  • Make sure to fully develop your conclusion to provide a comprehensive summary of the points discussed.

The essay uses a sufficient range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. The essay demonstrates a good command of a wide range of vocabulary related to the topic, with some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choices that could be clarified. Additionally, the use of more varied and precise language could help to better convey the ideas presented.

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are only minor errors. However, there are some sentences that could be more clear and concise. The essay uses a variety of complex and simple sentence structures, and the majority of sentences are free from grammatical errors. However, there are a few instances of awkward phrasing and grammatical inaccuracies that could be addressed to improve clarity and readability. Additionally, the use of more varied sentence structures could help to better convey the ideas presented.

The essay addresses the task effectively, providing a clear position throughout. The essay effectively addresses the prompt by discussing the reasons for the trend of urbanization and the problems it causes. The writer presents a clear explanation of the factors contributing to urbanization, such as centralization policies and territory expansion, and the issues it leads to, such as inequality and overpopulation. The ideas are well-developed and supported with relevant examples. However, the essay could benefit from a more detailed exploration of potential solutions to these problems.

Suggestions
  • Consider discussing potential solutions to the problems caused by urbanization to provide a more comprehensive response to the task.