Bar chart
The illustrated bar graph gives information about children’s regular activities as a portion of their bedtime schedule , including reading, cleaning teeth, having a bath, watching TV, and having a meal, highlighting three different age groups.
It is obvious at first glance that reading and brushing teeth are more obeyed than watching TV and eating. Additionally, the data makes it clear that 6-year-old children are less active in following the usual activities rather than younger ones, with the exception of cleaning their teeth.
Mentioning details, 4-5-year old children are dominant in the reading part, showing a rough 70 million. 1-3 years acquire the second place, consisting of 65 million approximately, while just below 60 million of 6-8 years are involved in this activity. Moving to brushing teeth, 6-8 years occupied the first place with 50 million, being ahead the 4-5 years by about 4 millions.
The bathing procedure indicates that 40 million of 1-3 years have a bath regularly, whereas the reBar st age groups include more than 30 million kids. Leisure activities like watching TV gain children in all age groups below 20, making it more active than eating, which involves mostly less than 10 million kids.
The essay generally follows a logical structure, with an introduction, overview, and detailed paragraphs. However, some sentences lack clarity and logical flow.
Suggestions
- Ensure logical progression of ideas.
- Use linking words effectively.
- Clarify ambiguous statements.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but some word choices are awkward or repetitive.
The essay contains several grammatical errors and awkward constructions that affect clarity.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and some inaccuracies in data interpretation.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed analysis.
- Ensure accurate data interpretation.