Bar chart illustrates thr average time spent on social media from 2000to 2020
The bar chart compares the amount of time spent on social media between 2000 and 2020. Overall, Twitter and Instagram showed an increase while the reverse was true for Facebook and Snapchat. It is also worth noting that Twitter grew constantly over the given year while Facebook exhibited constant decrease.
Starting with increasing patterns, both Twitter and Instagram had a starting point at 20 minutes in 2016. In 2017, Instagram experienced staggering rise to 40 minutes, distantly followed by Twitter at around 22 minutes. However, in 2018 both of them showed similar patterns at 30 minutes. In subsequent year, Twitter increased to 35 minutes, while Instagram halved almostly. In the last year, Twitter stood at its high peak at 40 minutes, instantly followed by Instagram, standing at 35 minutes.
In contrast, a completely different picture can be observed in remaining others. Starting at 25 minutes, Facebook showed decline constantly throughout the period and amounted to almost 3 minutes in 2020. As for Snapchat, it increased noticeably until 2019 although it made up 10 minutes in the initial year. But, it dropped dramatically from 40 minutes to just 10 minutes in the final year.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the main trends. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
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- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of collocation. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there is some evidence of control of a range of grammatical structures. However, there are a few grammatical errors and some sentences could be structured more accurately.
The essay provides a clear overview of the main trends and presents specific details to support the main points. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific data and by ensuring that all information is clearly and accurately presented.
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- Ensure that all information is clearly and accurately presented.
- Provide more specific data to support your main points.