Bar chart shows the percentage of the population in the UK (Women, Men and Children) who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of the population in the UK—women, men, and children—who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in the years 2002, 2006, and 2010.
Overall, it is clear that the percentage of women consuming fruit saw a dramatic increase during the middle of this period. Additionally, the proportion of children eating fruit experienced some fluctuations over the years.
Specifically, the percentage of women consuming fruit started at 25% in 2002. This figure rose sharply, peaking at 32% in 2006. However, there was a notable decline in fruit consumption among women, dropping to 27% in 2010. In contrast, the percentage of men who consumed fruit was 22% in 2002. Over the next four years, male fruit consumption climbed significantly to reach 28% in 2006, but then experienced a substantial decrease, falling to 24% in 2010.
The chart also shows that the percentage of children consuming fruit began at 11% in 2002. There was a significant upward trend in fruit consumption among children, reaching 16% in 2006. However, the percentage of children consuming fruit then dropped slightly to 14% in 2010.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. The information is sequenced in a way that makes the trends easy to follow, and there is good use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Consider using a wider range of linking words or phrases to show more variety.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. The vocabulary is generally used appropriately, with some good use of synonyms.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and the majority of sentences are error-free. There are a few minor errors, but these do not impede communication.
The essay provides a clear overview of the information presented in the chart, and it describes the main trends and changes. The essay also provides specific details and examples to support the main points.
Suggestions
- The essay could be improved by providing a more detailed analysis of the data, including explanations for the trends and changes observed.