Barchart
The bar chart provides data on the number of skilled workers in four occupations—accountant, cook, software engineer, and computer programmer—who migrated to Australia from 2009 to 2012. The figures are presented in thousands.
Overall, software engineers consistently represented the largest group of migrants each year, while computer programmers had the lowest numbers. Accountants and cooks had moderate levels of migration, showing varying trends over the period.
In 2009, the number of software engineers migrating to Australia was approximately 25,000, surpassing all other occupations. This figure slightly increased in 2010 and peaked at nearly 28,000 in 2011 before declining slightly in 2012. Accountants started with around 20,000 in 2009, then experienced a steady growth, reaching about 25,000 by 2012.
Cooks began with around 15,000 migrants in 2009, showing a gradual rise each year and ending at approximately 18,000 in 2012. Computer programmers, on the other hand, remained the smallest group, with fewer than 5,000 migrants in 2009. Despite a slight increase in 2010 and 2011, the number remained relatively low throughout the period.
In summary, software engineers were the most sought-after professionals migrating to Australia, while computer programmers showed limited growth. Accountants and cooks experienced steady increases in their migration numbers.
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The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary with precise word choice.
The essay uses a variety of sentence structures and maintains grammatical accuracy.
The essay effectively summarizes the main features of the bar chart and makes relevant comparisons.
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- Include more specific data points for other occupations to strengthen comparisons.