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Chart and table provide allocation of men and women for the household activities, apart from paid work, in 2008 in the UK.

The given table parents data on the allocation of time on leisure activities by males and females,while the accompanying bar chart shows the amount of time for household chores in 2008,in the UK.Overall,men spent more time for leisure activities except for reading,in which figures for both genders were the same .When it comes to accompanying bar chart,women allocated noticeably more time to household chores, whereas repairing was mainly done by men .
Looking at the details of leisure activities, both women and men spent the major of their time on TV,video and radio , at 137 and 118 minutes respectively.However,the time spent on reading was relatively equel between both genders ,that registered 18 minutes for men and 19 minutes for women .Sport activities were the least done by males and females,that accounted for 15 and 11 minutes .
Turning to the bar chart, women dedicated more time on cooking and washing , nearly at 70 minutes , whereas men spent on 30 minutes.This mainly preferred to be done by women, due to their experience on this field.Despite girls are active in this categories, repairing was mainly done by men ,at nearly 20 minutes.Because, it requires physical strength to work with heavy equipments that may seem difficult for women .Other household activities –shopping and ironing — showed quite different amounts.It translated to just over 20 for men ,while the women was quite dominate, with spending on 25 minutes.When it comes to ironing ,it was significantly done by women, because of their responsibility at home to do,while the men allocated 10 minutes.

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The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the data. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.

Suggestions
  • Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
  • Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.

The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and there is some evidence of a range of grammatical structures. However, there are several grammatical errors that can be distracting for the reader.

The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the main trends, differences or stages. The essay also includes relevant data and examples to support the overview.

Suggestions
  • Ensure that you fully understand the data presented in the chart or table and that you use it correctly in your writing.
  • Make sure that you clearly connect the data to your overall summary and that you use appropriate language to describe the data.