Chart and table provide allocation of men and women for the household activities, apart from paid work, in 2008 in the UK.
Table compares male and female in terms of their time that spent on Various pastimes, while bar chart illustrates information about time that they allocated to housework.
Overall, among leisure activities, watching TV and videos, as well as listening to the radio, consumed the most time for both genders. Additionally, washing dishes and cooking were the chores that occupied the most time. Notably, men spent more time on leisure activities, while women dedicated significantly more time to household tasks.
To start with details regarding the recreational activities, both genders preferred watching tv and videos and listening to the radio in most cases, with women spending 118 minutes daily, about 20 minutes less than men. Men also spent more minutes on doing sport, working out 15 minutes daily, compared to women who did sport 11 minutes per day. Conversely, reading only past time activity that females’ figures were higher than male, spending 19 minutes per day for reading, while male read 18 minutes a day.
Regarding household tasks, women spent majority of their time to washing dishes and cooking, averaging 78 minutes per day which was twice the time that men spent on washing and cooking. Additionally, men used one third time women spent to washing and ironing clothes, the former one illustrated approximately 10 minutes and the letter dedicated around 30 minutes. Shopping was the second most time-consuming activity for both genders, with women also spending more time than men, with respective figures being approximately 35 minutes and around 25 minutes. Finally, men spent just under 20 minutes on repairs, double the time women allocated to this task.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the information. The writer uses a range of cohesive devices and topic sentences to guide the reader through the text. However, there are a few areas where the flow of information could be improved.
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- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and avoid introducing new information in the conclusion.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are only minor errors. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect sentence structure.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the information. The data is accurately and appropriately selected and compared. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and by avoiding the use of symbols such as $
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- Provide more specific details to support your main points.
- Avoid the use of symbols such as $ in your writing.