Chart and table provide allocation of men and women for the household activities, apart from paid work, in 2008 in the UK.
The table and bar chart give information about how much time men and women spend their time on household and leisure activities in the year of 2008 in the United Kingdom.
Overall, in most cases men spend relatively higher amount of time on recreation activities than that for women while the reverse is true in terms of household chores. Notably, cooking and washing, followed by the media, are the most popular pastime among both categories.
To start with details about the table, ranked the first in both gender groups, TV, video, radio is the activity men and women allocate by far the highest amount of time, with the former showing 137 minutes and the latter 118 respectively. Even though men have dominance over expenditure of time in leisure activities, demonstrating more time spent than women did, reading was the exception where women spend 19 minutes, being a minute more than that of men. The allocation of time to sport activities stand out with lowest numbers; men spend 18 minutes while women spend 19 minutes.
In comparison, women spend far more time on most of the household activities than that of men except for repair where male allocate around 20 minutes per day while women have their about 10 minutes spent on that. However, women dominate other categories such as cooking and washing with the all-time highest amount of time of around 70 minutes, spending approximately 50 minutes more than that of men. Men spend their least time on laundry, about 10 minutes, while shopping was second the highest amount of time of 25 minutes per day. Expenditure of time for those activities is different for women, around 30 minutes for each household chores.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. It uses a range of cohesive devices and transitional phrases effectively. However, there are a few instances where the flow of information could be improved.
Suggestions
- Consider using a wider range of linking words and phrases to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all information in the paragraph is relevant to that topic.
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary and uses some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures and is generally accurate. However, there are a few minor errors that could be improved.
The essay provides a detailed and accurate description of the data presented in the chart and table. The writer highlights the key features and presents a clear overview of the information. However, the writer could provide a more detailed comparison of the data.
Suggestions
- Try to provide a more detailed comparison of the data. For example, you could discuss the differences in the amount of time spent on household activities between men and women in more detail.