Clothing exports (1999-2003)
The line group provides information on the number of experts in terms of value in clothing industry in three different states, being Columbia, Japan and Myanmar.
Overall, the total number of experts increased throughout given period apart from Japan industry witnessed a slight decrease. One of the most noticeable change is the massive spike in 2001.
In 1999, the total number of experts in Myanmar was equivalent to 0 million dollar. This figure experience a biggest rise, accounting for 800 million dollar in 2010 before reaching its peak of just over 900 million in 2001, meaning the most profitable year among three categories throughout given period. But, the total numbers had a sharp decrease, declining to just more than 300 million in 2002 before gaining a set of growth, with approximately 400 million in 2003
When it comes to Japan clothing sector, there was a small change, just list them 600 million in 1999, reached 600 million in 2001 before experiencing a tremendous drop, falling to lowest point of 500 million dollar. As for Columbia, the total number of experts was equivalent to around 480 million dollar in 1999. Then this figure boosted steadily, rising to 600 million before witnessing a minor change, declining to 600 million.
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