Consumers goods

The graph illustrates the expenditure of two different countries on consumers merchandise in 2010
Firstl,in uk three good consumers for merchandise cars,book and cameras.France did not sell should be many cars as the uk.The next popular merchandise is books sold out the 400.000,the last one is cameras.In my opinion UK’s people interest for cameras, and liked.
Secondly,of the performing commodities in the uk computer and perfume.However, computers similar to cameras in the different the rear 10.000.And very lowest performing commodities the perfume, because uk’s people don’t like the perfume and the perfume not interesting for UK’s people

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The essay is logically organized, and the information is clearly presented. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.

Suggestions

Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.

The essay uses a limited range of vocabulary and there are some inaccuracies in word choice and spelling.

The essay contains a number of grammatical errors and there is some inconsistency in the use of tense.

The essay addresses the task and provides an overview of the information. However, the essay could be more detailed and specific in the description of the data.