Dance classes in australia
The pie chart provides information on the locations of dance classes, the types of classes, and the ages of
participants in a town in Australia.
The chart shows four types of locations for dance classes. Private studios account for 48% of the total. School
halls are the second most common location, followed by community halls, which account for 18% of participants.
College-based studios account for the smallest share.
The participants are categorized by age into two groups: under 11 and 11 to 16. Ballet classes have 800
participants under the age of 11, making it the most popular class for this group. The next most popular class is
Tap, with around 450 participants, while the least popular is Modern dance, with 300 participants.
Among participants aged 11 to 16, 290 study in ballet classes. The second most popular class for this age group is
Tap, with around 470 participants. Most participants aged 11 to 16 study in Modern dance classes
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview of the information provided in the pie chart. The use of cohesive devices is effective, and the progression from general information to specific details is smooth.
Suggestions
- Consider using a wider range of linking words or phrases to avoid repetition and to further improve the flow of your writing.
The essay demonstrates a good range of vocabulary and uses some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of informal or colloquial language that could be improved.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are few grammatical errors. However, there are a few instances where the sentence structure could be improved for better clarity.
The essay provides a detailed and accurate description of the information presented in the pie chart. The key features are identified and described effectively, and the information is presented in a logical sequence.
Suggestions
- Make sure to double-check the accuracy of the information provided, especially when it comes to numerical data.