Dilahoda
Task 1
Dear Tutor,
The reason why I am addressing you is that I would like to take part in the evening course is hopeless. This course will not be continued by me which is began 20th September, owing to I will leave for gain experience at Istanbul almost a month.
Two staff choose according to new project at Sumsung company every year, which work a full time job. My company give chance their staffs and this possibility won’t decline.
Since, Istanbul will be gone pretty keen on with both my friend and colleague, I have to not continue English course. This practice is considerable for my promotion.
Having said that, I want to participate in next course and of course will enroll your course in 2025. Because of my goal, I will learn and get a national certificate in English.
I hope you will answer all my question regarding of evening course and reply my letter as soon as possible
Best regards
Choriyeva Dilshoda
The essay has a logical flow and organization, but there are some issues with the sequencing of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices appropriately.
- Ensure that the sequencing of information makes sense.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary, but there are some issues with word choice and collocation.
The essay has a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but there are several grammatical errors and inaccuracies in the use of grammatical structures.
The essay addresses the task and provides a clear position throughout the response. However, the essay could be more concise and focused.
Suggestions
- Try to be more concise and focused in your writing. Make sure to address all parts of the task.