Diyora
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am Choriyeva Diyora , I am 18 years old . I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the hotel .
A few days ago , I went to the hotel with my family to came to stand. However, we entered the bathroom we found that there was no hot water . We are very angry because hot water not working in such a big suit the reputation of the hotel .What made us even more angry was that your staff ignored it . Such employees should be fired because no customer likes such employees .
I would be grateful if you could fired the staff . I look forward to your reply and resolution to my problem.
Yours faithfully ,
Choriyeva Diyora
The essay is logically organized and the ideas are connected, but there are some issues with the flow of the message. The essay is structured with an introduction, body, and conclusion, which is good for overall organization. However, there are some issues with the flow of the message, which can be improved. Using more varied linking words and phrases can help to improve the flow and coherence of the essay. Additionally, using more specific topic sentences can help to clearly convey the main idea of each paragraph.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of linking words and phrases to improve the flow of your message.
- Include a clear and specific topic sentence at the beginning of each paragraph to help the reader understand the main idea.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. The essay demonstrates a good command of a range of vocabulary, with some use of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice, which can be improved. Additionally, using a wider range of vocabulary can help to make the essay more engaging and interesting to read.
The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and there is some evidence of a range of grammatical structures. The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, and there is some evidence of a range of grammatical structures. However, there are a few grammatical errors and awkward constructions that can be improved. Proofreading the essay to correct grammatical errors and improve sentence structure can help to enhance overall clarity and readability.
The essay addresses the task and provides a clear position throughout the response. The essay addresses the task and provides a clear position throughout the response. However, the argument could be more fully developed and supported with specific examples. Additionally, the conclusion could be strengthened by summarizing the main points and clearly restating the position.
Suggestions
- Include more specific examples to support your arguments.
- Strengthen the conclusion by summarizing the main points and clearly restating your position.