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The bar chart provides key information about spending money in various forms of activities from 1995 to 2000 , in Asia Europe and United states.
Overall, it is clear from the graph that the amount of money spent has been increased in different way over the five year period in all the regions.In addition,the rise was progressive in Asia and Europe , whereas in America the rate of money has increased more.
According to what is showen,In Asia and Europe. Asia entertainment has increased with 43 per cent ,slightly more than the European one which has only rised with 33 per cent . however we can see that European society still spent more money than the Asian , 97 in 1995 gone up to 131 in 2000.Moreover,Publishing and Television gradually upsurge which makes them the dominant activities in term of consuming money in Europe and Asia,compared to the other entertainments which has increased tediously.
In terms of United states , The amounts are very different and sharply bigger.In 1995 the rate of money spent was 184 and over the next five years has increased to 257 ,also we can observe that in America the publishing is the most used entertainment,arround 225 in 2000,adding that television’s money rate has been rised moderately.
To sum up we could say that United states invests more money in entertainment compared to Asia and Europe ,while Music video and cinema has the lowest budget in all the regions and only rised slightly over the five years period.
The essay presents information in a generally clear manner, but lacks logical progression and clear linking words.
Suggestions
- Use more linking words to improve flow.
- Ensure logical progression of ideas.
- Avoid abrupt transitions.
The vocabulary is adequate, but there are several spelling errors and limited use of advanced vocabulary.
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that hinder understanding.
The essay addresses the task but lacks detailed analysis and clear comparisons.
Suggestions
- Provide more detailed analysis of the data.
- Include clearer comparisons between regions.
- Ensure all key points from the graph are covered.