#exam_answers / 16.01.2025 TASK 1: The table and charts below give information about doctors in one country between 1986 and 2006
The graphs provide dates about the percentage of doctors ‘ gender and place of birth and their numbers in 1986 , 1996 and in 2006 in Australia .
Overall, it is clear that , the biggest number of doctors recorded kn 2006. Among them male specialists made up the largest proportion in 1986 and the biggest proportion of doctors was born in Australia .
Turning on the details , as time went by the number of medical workers increased from 23720 to 35450 in given periods in Australia . The percentage of male doctors fell from under 80% to nearly 60% in 1986 and 2006 . In contrast,share of famale doctors increased from about 25% to 40% at the same periods .
As far their place of birth, doctors was born in 1986 with 65% and dropped to 60% in 1996 in Australia . Their share of place of birth grew from 40% to 45% in overseas . Percent of place of birth was recorded at the same level accounting for 50% in both Australia and Overseas.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of an attempt to use less common and/or more complex vocabulary. However, there are a few awkward or incorrect word choices.
The essay makes use of a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and the majority of sentences are grammatically correct. However, there are a few grammatical errors and some sentences are awkwardly phrased.
The essay provides a summary of the information presented in the graphs, but the information is not always clearly or accurately presented. There are several issues with the clarity and accuracy of the information presented, and these need to be addressed before the essay can be considered an effective response to the task.
Suggestions
- Make sure to clearly and accurately present all of the information provided by the graphs.
- Pay close attention to the details in the graphs and make sure that your writing is an accurate representation of this data.