Global market mobile phone sales between 2005 and 2006
The table illustrates the percentage share of global mobile phone sales in the years 2005 and 2006.
Overall, the sales of Nokia, Motorola, and Sony Ericson increased over the period in the question while the opposite trend was observed in the percentages of Samsung, LG, BenQ Mobile and other unspecified companies. Moreover, while Nokia dominated the market with the highest percentage of sold items, BenQ Mobile had the lowest market share.
Focusing on increases first, the percentage of mobile phones sold by Nokia was nearly a third of the total market sales in 2005. A year later, it increased to 35 percent consolidating its dominance in the global mobile phone market. Similarly, in 2005, the proportions of phones sold by Motorola and Sony Ericson were 17.7% and 6.3% respectively. The former company increased by 3.4% and the latter grew by 1.1% in terms of phone sales.
By contrast, the remaining companies experienced decreases of varying degree. Samsung sold 12.7% of global mobile phone sales in 2005, the figure then dropped slightly to 11.8%. LG also experienced a slight decline from 6.7% to 6.3% between 2005 and 2006. In contrast, BenQ Mobile witnessed the most significant decrease over the period from 2005 to 2006, with the respective figures being 4.9% and 2.4%. Other unnamed companies decreased by 3% from 19.2% to 16.2 % over the period given.
The essay is well-organized with clear paragraphing and logical progression of ideas.
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- Ensure all company names are consistently spelled.
- Use linking words to enhance flow.
The vocabulary is appropriate and varied, though there are minor spelling errors.
The essay demonstrates a good range of grammatical structures with minor inaccuracies.
The task is well addressed, with all major trends and comparisons accurately described.