Harbour
The maps illustrates information about changes in a port, from 2000 to today’s day.
Overall, we can see in the maps places that did not modificate over years, like car parks,main roads, etc. However, we still can identify that there is some reforms betwen two pictures.
To start with, in the north eastern part of the first map, we can see changes in dock, in 2000 dock was only one with heavy diameter platform. However,in today’s day, this dock is changed in two with thin diameter platforms. In the north western side illustrated Marina(private yachts) and fishing boats in south, that are switched with places today’s.
In south western, next to car parks added showers and toilets. Furthermore, in south eastern, demonstrated new place. For example, a hotel, that in 2000 was a castle, also today’s this hotel has his own private beach, that in 2000 was a public beach.
The essay is logically organized and presents a clear overview. However, there are some issues with the flow of information and the use of cohesive devices.
Suggestions
- Use a variety of cohesive devices to improve the flow of information.
- Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central topic and that all sentences in the paragraph relate to this topic.
The essay uses a range of vocabulary and there is some evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay makes use of a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, and there is some evidence of a range of grammatical structures. However, there are several grammatical errors that can be distracting for the reader.
The essay addresses all parts of the task and presents a clear overview of the information. However, the essay could be improved by providing more specific details and by making more explicit comparisons between the two maps.
Suggestions
- Include specific data from the maps to support your descriptions.
- Make more explicit comparisons between the two maps to highlight key differences and similarities.