In a lot of countries today, people can buy a wider range of household goods, such as microwaves, televisions, or rice cookers, than ever before. Is this a positive or negative development?
There has been a significant increase in terms of both manufacturing and purchasing household possessions in recent years. This trend has both negative and positive aspects, but overall I feel that it is a positive development.
Considering the tendency of people to buy household belongings, many factories may focus on short-term guaranteed time thereby possibly worsening the quality. They may furnish their products with less durable elements lowering the price proportionally. This strategy is likely to encourage customers to change their current mechanisms to new ones. In Uzbekistan, for example, many Uzbeks tend to consider the price while buying, neglecting the quality which results in spending even more money to replace from time to time.
Keeping up with the time and replacing old belongings with new ones is usually beneficial, taking advantage of recent technologies thereby saving quality time for other tasks or spending more time with family. Unlike gadgets, majority of our household goods cannot be updated to access recent innovations, urging us to purchase new ones to experience the latest innovations. This is what is called a revolution in mechanisms. Vacuum cleaners fit this situation perfectly. Its creation was followed by brooms which were used by people from the past, and then vacuum cleaners were invented to make cleaning easier, but still using hands. Eventually, smart cleaners that do not require any human intervention have become available to use.
To sum up, while frequent purchases of household belongings are expensive, they can provide people with the latest privileges. I, therefore, claim that this phenomenon is positive.
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. However, there are a few areas where the flow of ideas could be improved.
Suggestions
- Try to use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas.
- Ensure that your examples are directly relevant to the point you are making.
The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.
The essay uses a variety of complex structures. However, there are a few grammatical errors and awkward constructions.
The essay addresses the task effectively and presents a clear position throughout the response. However, the argument could be more fully developed and supported with specific examples.
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- Try to provide more specific examples to support your arguments.
- Ensure that each paragraph fully develops a single point.