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In many countries, people increasingly talk about money such as how much they earn or how much they pay for things in their daily conversations. Why? Is this a positive or negative trend?

In many countries, people increasingly talk about topics related to money – such as the quality of their wages and the payments for particular items – in everyday conversations. This is because of the need for money to make different transactions and the scarce of topics to talk with. In my perception, talking about money is normal, but this topic should not be the most popular one among other, more engaging ones; thus, I believe it is mostly detrimental to social lives of people.
The main reason for money subjects people talk about is the need for money. Since the introduction of a new type of payment what we call ‘money’, people started making different transactions in a more fair way as the money evaluates any item showing the perfect possible exchange. For example, everyone on Earth has right to buy products in supermarkets, and the value of a product in one shop is not different from one in other shop, which emphasizes the power of money. If we did not have money, we would start exchanging items with each other, but this could lead to dissatisfaction of people due to the unprofitable and disbalanced exchange of one side. Therefore, the majority of people just appreciate the importance of money and talk about it with others on a regular basis.
Another less obvious reason for the activity of that topic is scarce of other topics. People sometimes just suffer from the insufficient number of interesting topics to talk with close ones. In other words, they have already discussed the most incentive topics on Earth, and the alternative option for them is to talk about money. However, in my opinion, there should be the end of this topic because it is too boring to talk only about money while the modern world offers unlimited number of topics.
I believe that the money is just useful resource to exchange fairly. Therefore, people do not have to talk about them all the time. Instead, there are plenty of other engaging subjects and spheres, which are great candidates for being one of the topics we discuss every day. For instance, a teenager, who is interested in mobile games, can talk about games with other similar gamer who is also a teenager; it all depends on individuals’ interests. If money is the most common topic among indiciduals, it is difinitely detrimental to their social lives as it is not the best topic for communication, as I mentioned before.
In summary, people do not stop talking about money because they know the essence of it in the modern world we now live in, but they might also talk about it as an alternative choice. Despite this, I think it is negative statement as people could talk about more interesting topic.

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The essay is logically organized and the progression of ideas is clear. However, there are some issues with the flow of ideas and the use of cohesive devices.

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