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In recent years, there has been a rise in the use of performance-enhancing drugs in sports. What are the consequences of doping for athletes? What measures should be taken to combat this issue?

In the last decade, the using of substances which is not allowed in sport is becoming increasingly popular among among the athletes. In this essay, I will look at the reasons behind the rise of drug intaking and try to give some solutions.
Firstly, there is a serious competition which is not everyone can stand. Especially, youngsters try to show off themselves and they do not much care about the rules. Their only ambition is winning. Therefore, they use drugs even though they know it is prohibited. Additionally, prizes which is equal to even tens of million dollars may be the cause of such a process. Because many people desire to live in luxury houses, drive expensive cars by not doing hard-work. To tackle this problem, inform people the consequences of doping can be a key solution. Organizing events to the youth could be very effective. Moreover, reduces the amount of prizes might solve the problem.
Secondly, beacuse they afraid to lose their fame, some super stars consume drugs. Losing can be the end for some sport athletes due to horrible competition and fans. Because fans usually support only winners not losers. For example, one of the most famous French football player, who won the FIFA World Cup 2022, Paul Pogra sent off from football for two years bacause of doping. To address this issue

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The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. However, the ideas are not fully developed and there are some abrupt transitions between ideas. The use of cohesive devices is also limited and sometimes inaccurate.

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  • Make sure each paragraph fully develops one main idea.

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The essay addresses the task and provides a relevant response to the prompt. However, the essay does not fully develop the arguments and the examples provided are not fully developed or explained. The essay also contains some irrelevant information.

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