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In the past, people stored knowledge in books. Nowadays, people store knowledge on the internet. Do the advantage outweigh the disadvantages?

Information used to be stored in paper format, and now with the advancing technology, it is being stored on the internet, while there are certain drawbacks, they are for outweighed by benefits.
One disadvantage of storing knowledge digitally is vulnerability to hacking attacks. As the technology advances, so does the tools of hackers. Once successively hacked, the owner of the information could become a victim of various crimes such blackmail. Too much reliance on the cloud storage platforms is another drawback. In case of any unforeseen events, such as power outage or damage to one of servers,the material stored on the internet could be permanently lost. As a result, It will incur huge financial losses across the globe.
Despite these downsides, the upsides of this development are much greater. A major advantage is accessibility. With this change, it is now possible to get access to almost all sorts of information, such as books, news and documentaries within a few seconds from all parts of the word. A further significant benefit is saving storage space. For instance, now there is no need to take physical copies of books to a vacation. All it takes is to download the book to a smartphone or a reading device like Kindle. Apart from that, finding a certain part of document is a challenge no more, thanks to a “search” feature, now the desired part can be found in an instant.
ln conclusion, storing information on the internet may make it less safe and pose a threat of being lost but these are not as significant as the benefits which include convenient access and elimination of need for space to store items.

7.0

The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. However, there are a few areas where the flow of ideas could be improved.

Suggestions
  • Use a variety of linking words to connect your ideas.
  • Ensure that your conclusion effectively summarizes the key points of your essay.

The essay uses a good range of vocabulary and there is evidence of some less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence forms and there are only minor errors. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect phrasing.

The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout the response. However, the argument could be more fully developed in places.

Suggestions
  • Ensure that you fully develop your arguments and provide sufficient support for your points.
  • Consider addressing potential counterarguments to strengthen your position.