islom

Dear Mr. Shokhruh
I am writing to apologize that I will not attend your evening IT course. I work in the supermarket from 8 am to 6 pm o`clock every day. I was attending your course after work.
Nowadays, people prefer to buy product on supermarket than market. Since, supermarkets offer some comfortable to them. That is why, rise of customer cause to I will work from 10 am to 10 pm until new year holiday in the supermarket. As the result, I can`t take part in your computer course.
After new year holiday, I will return my previous work time that day-time. And, I will continue course other group which probably smaller level or new group. Because, my groupmates will have learned some topic and I can`t continue your course with they.
I am hoping you will understand me. I look forward to hearing from you.
Best regards.
Islom.

4.5

The essay is somewhat difficult to follow due to a lack of clear organization and some repetitive elements. The use of cohesive devices is inconsistent, and the structure of the essay could be improved for better clarity.

Suggestions

Use a variety of cohesive devices to create clear connections between your ideas.
Organize your essay with a clear structure, including an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

The vocabulary is generally appropriate, but there are several instances of awkward or incorrect word choice. Using a more varied and precise vocabulary would enhance the quality of the essay.

The essay contains a number of grammatical errors, including issues with verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. These errors can make the writing difficult to understand.

The essay addresses the task, but the argument is not fully developed. The writer’s reasons for not attending the course could be more clearly explained. The essay does not meet the word limit, which could be a concern.